gymnastgal19
Sunday 5th October 2008 11:29 | Black Magic |
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gymnastgal19
Tuesday 25th March 2008 00:15 | Black Magic |
aww ww ww!!! cute story!!! I love how you did this without names
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levotatingT
Monday 11th July 2005 20:45 | Black Magic |
I really loved it how one box of chocolates can do that, but it was confusing to tell who was who, becayuse not everyone was mentioned
great job though, keep writing, and PLez write back
levotatingT |
St Margarets
Thursday 7th July 2005 12:46 | Black Magic |
| Lovely, hot Arthur and Molly love! Wonderfully sensual, nundu. I'm going to link you over on the fluff thread! |
Cera
Tuesday 5th July 2005 22:22 | Black Magic |
| This was a lovely little story. I like that you didn't use any names, but we could tell who it was anyway. Great job, I wish there was more of it. |
| Wednesday 6th July 2005 08:01 | Black Magic (Author Response) |
Thanks to everyone for such lovely reviews! I had a delightful time writing it and want to thank two fabulous betas, Mitsi and Ravenclaw Reader.
I intentionally did not name characters (except for one minor slip up), wanting to concentrate on identifying them by characterization only, hence the mystery of the second couple.
The first couple are, of course, Molly and Arthur. The second are Charlie and an unknown character. (I thought it was Bill, but Charlie informed me that he, too, had a love life!) The third is Ginny, and she saves the almonds for Harry. The fourth is Ron and Hermione.
Again, thanks to all who reviewed! |
Delani
Tuesday 5th July 2005 12:57 | Black Magic |
| Thsi was definitely a different and interesting, take on the topic. I liked guessing which scenario belonged to whom, but I'm a little puzzled, as not every Weasley was included. Well done though! |
snowball
Tuesday 5th July 2005 01:10 | Black Magic |
| That was a nice story with different POV. I'm a bit confused though, I assume the third POV refers to Ron and Hermione and the last POV refers to Harry? Intriguing story. |
Ainsley
Monday 4th July 2005 19:36 | Black Magic |
| who were the second couple? |
Split Decision
Monday 4th July 2005 14:02 | Black Magic |
| I think I need to go find my toothbrush (fluff alert!) but this is a wonderful fic, nonetheless. Great language and a wonderful idea. |
Sunshine
Sunday 3rd July 2005 20:34 | Black Magic |
| I really enjoyed the tidbits from different viewpoints. It was fun to be challenged to figure out who was studying the box of chocolates, and I particularly enjoyed the tenderness with which all the characters treated each other. It was a lovely story. |
x_Rose_x
Saturday 2nd July 2005 04:51 | Black Magic |
| I like this one very much! the style you have written in is fantastic I
love how you almost never mention any names and yet you instantly know
who the charecteres are, now thats got to be a sign of a good writer,
right? lol anyway this is really fantastic I loved it!
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happydog
Friday 1st July 2005 12:55 | Black Magic |
I'm not sure if the title does this one justice but pretty good fic. I like how each person had a different reaction to the box of chocolates. Good job.
Happydog. |
sonicdale
Friday 1st July 2005 08:53 | Black Magic |
Repetition in writing is hard to pull off. It needs cadence, rythym.
You did it well here. Love the fact that there's no dialogue. Sometimes it just gets in the way.
Nice chocolate. Now my mouth is watering!
Good work. |
z2a_a2z
Friday 1st July 2005 07:00 | Black Magic |
| This was a lot like dipping into an assorted box of chocolates in real
life - bits and pieces of various flavors, all sweet and savory.
Thanks for the sweets!
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Ladybug
Friday 1st July 2005 05:08 | Black Magic |
| I love this story - it's crafted beautifully. Every word fits perfectly and deliciously and your characters are so very rich. I'm envious at how much depth you've conveyed with such simple and so few words. Thanks and congratulations. |
Arnel
Friday 1st July 2005 00:52 | Black Magic |
Great story! I really like how you kept the continuity of each section with the same sentence starting each. Of all the sections, though, the first two about Molly and Arthur were the best because hardly anyone writes about them exclusively. I love how Arthur loves his wife no matter what shape she is and the fact that each curve has special meaning to him. My second favorite section was Ginny’s celebration of being accepted by her brothers as an equal on the Quidditch pitch. I really enjoyed reading the thoughts that a solitary box of chocolates can inspire. Well done, well done!
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Arnel
Friday 1st July 2005 00:26 | Black Magic |
Great story! I really like how you kept the continuity of each section with the same sentence starting each. Of all the sections, though, the first two about Molly and Arthur were the best because hardly anyone writes about them exclusively. I love how Arthur loves his wife no matter what shape she is and the fact that each curve has special meaning to him. My second favorite section was Ginny’s celebration of being accepted by her brothers as an equal on the Quidditch pitch. I really enjoyed reading the thoughts that a solitary box of chocolates can inspire. Well done, well done! |
Bella
Thursday 30th June 2005 20:33 | Black Magic |
That was GREAT! Really, really good. Definitely one of the best I've read. I knew who everyone was instantly; they were all very in-character. Extremely well-written. A delightful treat!
Good luck in this competition - you deserve it!
Bella |
Megan SQ
Thursday 30th June 2005 18:39 | Black Magic |
| Very nice rythm to it.
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Delylah
Thursday 30th June 2005 17:14 | Black Magic |
| Wow. This is absolutely gorgeous, though I'm having a little trouble
figuring out the couple in the third section...Bill and Fleur, perhaps?
Lovely story, and you illustrated so wonderfully the different
reactions to the sweets. I especially liked Molly and Arthur...just
beautiful :)
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Cambryn
Thursday 30th June 2005 12:19 | Black Magic |
| Lovely descriptions. |
amulder
Thursday 30th June 2005 10:58 | Black Magic |
Wow, that was steamy. Suggestion, hints, raised eyebrows, can be so much more tantalizing than just laying things out.
Lets see: Molly, Arthur, Mystery Couple, Ginny, and
Ron/Hermione. Am I right? So who is the mystery
couple? Everything else seems to indicate recent canon, so I'd go
with Bill/Fleur, but there is no mention of long blond hair. Hmm.
Well done. Is it you, Mary? You did the 'repetition' thing
with the last challenge back in February, which leads to my guess.
(hope I haven't done foot-in-mouth)
best
...art
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