daniel_r_crazy22
Sunday 30th July 2006 15:54 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| Yes. For luck. And hopefully good luck, not bad. Very good. |
Anka
Sunday 1st January 2006 21:47 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
Well, I really like this story already, Joe. It was nice being
able to read all these chapters at once, though I was definitely
msising out by not reading it earlier. Though I know I'll be busy
for the next few months, I'm going to try and keep up with this.
It had been a very good day, and he was not happy to see it coming to
an end, but he knew all too well that nothing lasted forever.
That's such an emotionally charged line. Works well to help start the story off.
an interesting affair to say the least
Oh, I bet it was. Any chance of seeing it in flashbacks?
Harry winced. "No. I can't.” This, the real reason behind his being up
here and not downstairs with the others. "That dress. I can't take
her wearing that dress.” The rumbling creature within Harry thought
there were any number of things he could do with her in that dress...or
witho– Harry stamped on it and came back to himself.
Nicely done there. I love the reference to the rumbling creature within Harry as a throwback to HBP.
"It's my brother's wedding day, Harry. I'm not leaving until he and
Fleur do." Ron glared at him again, turned on his heel, and walked out
of the room
I think that's important, and I'm glad that Ron didn't back down on
it. No matter how difficult it is what the trio are off to do,
family is important, especially in wartimes.
Ginny gave a humourless laugh. "We weren't together over a holiday or anything, how exactly was she to know?"
Oh, interesting thought about Molly not knowing about Harry and
Ginny. This had never occurred to me, just as Harry. but a
nice touch, nonetheless.
And such a bittersweet end to the chapter. I love that they got
the kiss, but at the same time, knowing what has to come now for
Harry... it makes my heart ache for them.
As I've said, I've read all that you have up, but reviews may be slow
in coming. I'm off to bed now, and I've got staff meeting stuff
tomorrow and student teaching starting Tuesday, but I'm going to
attempt to get my reviews up in a timely fashion (though I do know
you'll be happy to see them whenever I get them up).
Annika :)
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| Tuesday 3rd January 2006 09:12 | Flotsam and Jetsam (Author Response) |
Thanks for the review, Annika! :) That you read all of the chapters at
once says something that is a review itself, in a way, though I
certainly look forward to reading your thoughts on the rest of the
chapters.
I doubt I'll be doing any Dursley flashbacks - I've no real use for
them, and nothing that happened while Harry, Ron, and Hermione were
there is really relative to the story I'm trying to tell, beyond what
I've already said.
'Bittersweet' will set the tone for a lot of this story, I think. Well,
one of the tones, I should say. In a story this long, if you've got
only one tone, you'll find yourself sorely lacking, just as in any
tapestry.
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misslara
Tuesday 9th August 2005 02:42 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
Good for him being so frustrated!God that must've been the most annoying thing I read in HBP but you're making Harry pay for his mistake, and very nicely too. Can't wait to read what's in the next chapter.
Nice Ron characterization too, I can see how he wouldn't want to leave before the end of the wedding, even if Harry doesn't understand at first. |
Arnel
Sunday 7th August 2005 06:53 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| You've set up the rest of the story brilliantly. Harry's distress about being away from Ginny/wanting to be with her is palpable and I love the fact that Ron wants to stick around until the happy couple have left the Burrow. That was a very nice touch, giving closure to this part of Ron's life. I'm looking forward to your next chapters. Please post again soon. |
SillyGillie
Saturday 6th August 2005 22:47 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| Good job! I loved this line, "smuggle along a book or twelve" sounds very on key! Nice job, I can't wait to read more! |
Delani
Friday 5th August 2005 13:15 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
Ooh, I like it! I was itching to just go out and write the adventure, and not the immediate snog-fest, but I think you'll do the job just fine!
Terribly excited,
Delani |
J62442
Friday 5th August 2005 13:07 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
Love it! I hope you continue with this! |
Jner
Friday 5th August 2005 11:22 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| Oh, excellent! I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter. I too, am very pleased with how you've portrayed Ginny. She's a very stong girl, especially when it comes to Harry. How long did she wait for him? I don't think she'll give up on him that easily. Nor will Harry be able to push her from his mind. Excellent job. Well done. More!! |
critmo
Friday 5th August 2005 01:38 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| I was afraid soemthing like that would happen. Why does Harry have to be such an idiot? - Well written, anyway. |
jamadagni
Friday 5th August 2005 01:30 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
The first post-HBP non-single-shot endeavour eh? Bound to be good. :)
I've not read this yet, but will do so right now, and please do update often! ;)
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Antosha
Thursday 4th August 2005 22:47 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
:smacks Harry about the head and shoulders:
Silly boy.
;-) |
pfan2
Thursday 4th August 2005 22:01 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
beautiful - the first multi-chapter HBP story! Yay!
good start, btw! |
Ima Quidditch Fan
Thursday 4th August 2005 19:50 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| Wowie, wow-wow! I loved THAT kiss more than JKRs! |
DaFalcon
Thursday 4th August 2005 18:22 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
Very, very good start. |
kaiserzacc
Thursday 4th August 2005 16:15 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| that was a great start...i can tell that Harry is going to have some major problems with leaving Ginny behind...good he should |
Antosha
Thursday 4th August 2005 15:28 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
:smacks Harry about the head and shoulders:
Silly boy.
;-) |
met19
Thursday 4th August 2005 15:15 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| what a beginning! you show how ginny understands harry and how the others really don't and you also show how they desire each other.....let the h/g flow...... |
tess
Thursday 4th August 2005 15:03 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
*sigh*
I know it has to be that way. but it irks me just the same.
Brilliantly done - I appreciate the way you've captured Ginny's approach to the situation.. she's a very smart woman and you've got her down to that in a few lines. Well done! |
dophingirl79
Thursday 4th August 2005 14:53 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| very good you got to keep writing, you already got me hooked. |
Bart
Thursday 4th August 2005 12:51 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| Excellent start, particually liked Ron and the way he argued his points
about his sister (and his brother). And Ginnys responce to Harrys kiss
was perfect and just what he needed.
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OHGinnyfan
Thursday 4th August 2005 11:38 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
Wonderful start to the story! Like the rest of your fans, I am waiting for the next chapter.
I like your Ginny and feel that the way you have started this could be how JKR starts Seventh Year. I'm of the thought that Ginny only let Harry break up with her, because she knows he has to be the one to end it, and that she has to let him do it on his own. Not that a little "inspiration" from a lovely little redhead wouldn't help. ;o)
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, and look forward to seeing what happens next -- and I'm not one to start WIP either!
Susan |
| Thursday 4th August 2005 11:57 | Flotsam and Jetsam (Author Response) |
| Thanks, Susan! I'm glad that I was able to sucker you into my WIP! ;-)
I agree on the reason why Ginny let Harry break up with her. And I
think there will be a lot more "inspiration" to come, lol!
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hpiknut
Thursday 4th August 2005 11:08 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
| I loved this! Harry's really going to struggle with his self-control eh?! Please get the next chapter up soon! This is very intriguing! |
| Thursday 4th August 2005 11:17 | Flotsam and Jetsam (Author Response) |
| Thank you kindly! The next chapter should be up fairly soon. It is
already written, and I'm sending it in to my beta in a few minutes. She
should have it up fairly soon.
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Melindaleo
Thursday 4th August 2005 10:50 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
Darn you, Faelaern! I was determned NOT to get hooked on any 7th year fics. I was determined to stick to oneshots, or post-OotP, or post-Hogwarts or something else. I was determined to wait for canon's version of the real ending. Didn't last very long, did I?
I saw your name and had to peek - so I did - and I was instantly hooked. I loved the anguish and honestly from Harry. And I loved Ginny's quiet acceptance of what he's going through. I know a lot of people said the end of HBP wasn't like Ginny - but I thought it was perfect Ginny. It wasn't what she wanted, but she proved that she understands Harry better than anyone. If you love something, set it free, right?
Harry won't be able to stay away from her, because he does love her - and, unfortunately, I don't think either Snape or Malfoy have missed it. (Although I'm still up in the air on Snape's true movtives). I'm eagerly anticipating which direction you will take us and have resigned myself that I've already given up my pledge. But just this once! |
| Thursday 4th August 2005 11:16 | Flotsam and Jetsam (Author Response) |
*roguish grin* Well I'm honoured that I was able to break your resolve!
I agree about Ginny. She's a very tough girl, and that's not to be
ignored, but she also knows she can't make Harry's choices for him. So
yes, if you love something, set it free.
You're right though, Harry won't be able to stay away from her for too
long. The next chapter is just the trio though, along with some new
players in the game. I'm having a great deal of fun with this! ;)
Anyway, thanks for your review! The first chapter should be some soonish.
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wej5541
Thursday 4th August 2005 10:12 | Flotsam and Jetsam |
Excellent start, I can't wait for more. I hope you get Ginny to go with them relatively soon. I liked that Molly thought Harry fancied Fleur. |
| Thursday 4th August 2005 11:11 | Flotsam and Jetsam (Author Response) |
| I'm not sure how soon Ginny will be with them; but I do know that Harry
won't be able to keep himself away for too too long. I should tell you
that Ginny won't be in the next chapter, though.
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