|
|
daniel_r_crazy22 Sunday 30th July 2006 09:03 | In Memoriam | Aww. I wonder what Harry is going to say if he goes to the memorial. Hmm. | kaiserzacc Tuesday 21st June 2005 00:51 | In Memoriam | wow...i can see harry as some sort of future Mad Eye Moody...lots of guilt, hunting people for vengence.
"Trying to ease the guilt a little by putting things right."
that's a perfect way of describing the both of them | lissabee Wednesday 29th December 2004 14:24 | In Memoriam | It was a good chapter...Harry was mourning appropriately, but not overly morose. An interesting idea for a memorial service | pixiellie Thursday 23rd September 2004 13:41 | In Memoriam |
What an interesting start to a story! Normally, we see Harry either receiving all
his information through Weasley letters or Remus comes to visit. I like the uniqueness of Harry interacting
with Moody. I also like that he wasn’t
suddenly taken away from Privet Drive.
Your interpretation of Mad Eye is engaging. He is, more than any other HP canon
character, a soldier first. I believe
his reaction to Harry in these scenes.
His dry humor, his dead pan delivery of his information about Sirius, as
well as his brusque way of addressing Harry’s guilt ring true to the books as
well as fleshing out his personality.
Good job. Harry post OOP (and
post traumatic stress) would need someone who’s been to hell and back to talk
to. Remus is too close to the loss: Harry would just feel more guilt at his
pain. Mad Eye’s acceptance of the
risks and loss make his hyper attention to safety even more understandable.
The memorial will be interesting to see. Right now Harry has been jarred out of his
guilty mindset. At least a little. How will these new thoughts hold once he’s
faced with his friends who fought with him and those who also loved
Sirius? I can’t wait to find out.
Your sentence structure and spelling were excellent. Please pass along my thanks to your
betas. Thank you as well. It takes a great deal of courage to share
something you’ve created with others.
This is an excellent start, and I look forward to see where your story
leads. Please continue. Best regards,
ellie --pixie
|
|