Patches
Monday 27th August 2007 01:36 | Returning Were As Tedious |
| This is a very good portrayal of Severus life as a child. It would deffinitely show reasons why he grew up with some of the attitudes he has as an adult. I appreciate you pointing out the similarities and differences between canon and the au aspects of your story. Any differences I find I give to you the author as your right to change what you can and wish to change. That is what makes your story unique. So do what you are doing best and write the story your way. I am certainly enjoying your efforts. I can't come up with a story on my own so I depend on talented people like you to entertain me. Thanks so much for your time. p |
| Friday 19th October 2007 13:23 | Returning Were As Tedious (Author Response) |
| Goodness, I don't know how I failed to respond to this review for so long! I truly appreciated it; I'm delighted that you like the story. Thanks so much. ~Ken |
Neli P
Friday 24th August 2007 23:05 | Returning Were As Tedious |
Two things I love best in this chapter:
First : The third couplet of the Sorting Hat Song. Every line sounds so poetic, yet so true and powerful at the same time. Just the way a great song is made!
Second : \"A hat, a song, a seed\" ... To me, the \"seed\" here is Snape\'s perception of James. I think you brought out their differences very skillfully. How could Snape befriend someone to whom everything seems to come so easily: love, success and fortune?
Finally, it is a BRILLIANT decision NOT to change your storyline after DH. And consider this a huge compliment, as you know how I feel about "dear" Severus (and I still feel the same way after DH ) |
| Saturday 25th August 2007 22:10 | Returning Were As Tedious (Author Response) |
Thanks again, Neli.
I like what you say about the seed. There are a lot of seeds in this chapter, as there were in Chapter Two. The sense I'm trying to create here (remember that Macbeth is my lens) is of decisions and events piling on each other to create a kind of inevitability, even though one different choice along the way might have altered the outcome. So yes, that first glance at James, and at Sirius, and at Lily -- and, while we're at it, at Eliza and Dumbledore and Lucius and...
I chewed my lip for a long time about what to do about DH. I think if the novel had completely trashed my major premise for this story, I might have just abandoned it. But the novel agreed with me (well, okay, with Frelling, who gave me the premise in the first place ) mostly, with contradictions in only a few places that I considered minor. Honestly I don't know whether I'll have the stamina to finish this story, but I will try.
~Ken
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Grandma Kate
Friday 24th August 2007 11:35 | Returning Were As Tedious |
Ken, you have given us a lot to ponder in your story and Author's Note. I look forward to Chapter Four.
Your Sorting Hat Son is top rate. Bravo! |
| Friday 24th August 2007 21:04 | Returning Were As Tedious (Author Response) |
| Thanks, Kate. That Song took me a long time to write; I'm glad you like it. Chapter Four may be a while before it's finished; lots of RL stuff getting in the way, and the Chapter is taking turns I didn't originally expect. ~Ken |
girlspell
Thursday 23rd August 2007 18:41 | Returning Were As Tedious |
Great seeing this chapter.
"I want to be with my own kind\" That\'s all isolated and alone Snape wants. I think Sanpe will continue to be alone surrounded d by Sytherins.
I noticed the subtle and overt changes in the story. I\'m really lookikng forward to learning more about the most interesting character, (other then Snape) the very charming Lucius |
| Friday 24th August 2007 21:01 | Returning Were As Tedious (Author Response) |
| Thanks, Rachel. The thing about Lucius: In order for your temptor (tempter?) to be believable, he as to be, well, tempting. So I figured that charm was the way to do it. ~Ken |
