majolie
Tuesday 18th December 2007 20:08 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| I got shivers reading this - it was so perfect! |
harry_ginnyfan
Tuesday 13th November 2007 19:22 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
Nice story! Will there be any more to this, or was this a one time deal?
You should add more. If not, it is still a nice story.
Cheers!
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| Tuesday 13th November 2007 19:28 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine (Author Response) |
| Considering it's been over 3 years since I wrote this, I'd say it's a one-shot (I may be slow, but I'm not that slow! ) I'm glad you liked it all the same. Thanks for leaving a review! |
pyromain
Monday 25th June 2007 09:29 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| this is so cute, I really liked the way the come to each other in this story. |
Rebel_Dream
Tuesday 10th April 2007 13:43 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| that was so amazing. I liked this one-shot. |
Bryher
Sunday 18th March 2007 13:51 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| A lovely story thanks Very sweet and romantic. A couple of "brit picks" though - petrol isn't *that* expensive! About 80-90p a litre. And in a British pub, if you're too young for ale (beer) then you're too young for cider as well! |
monkey14
Sunday 11th March 2007 01:00 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| i love this story its awesome keep writing! |
cckeimig
Thursday 8th March 2007 21:28 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| Very, very enjoyable! |
Lily Flower
Wednesday 7th March 2007 12:04 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
Wow...it's a nice story. Very much in cannon I think. I really really liked it. Thank you for sharing it with us. Great job!
Lils |
Dollface
Tuesday 6th March 2007 17:35 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| OMG i loved it.! it was soo sweet...is there a sequel?? |
rupertgrintsgirl
Monday 5th March 2007 19:32 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| Biker Boy And Biker Babe! I like it! |
ibelieveintruelove
Monday 5th March 2007 10:54 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| Very cute! I love that Harry was so nervous around her and everything, it made for an excellent story! |
Felix Felicis
Tuesday 28th November 2006 20:05 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| I love this story! I can't believe in all the time I've been at PhoenixSong, I've never seen it before. Quite well written. I love the idea of them working together, getting to know each other through actions and cooperation rather than talking. Working in such close proximity to each other for days on end would certainly change their relationship, and you showed that very well. I love the hesitancy but the acceptance as well. The storm was perfect as it not only provided a change to the scene and forced them back together again, but it also represented the upheaval of their relationship. Wonderful storytelling. I can't tell you how much I liked this! Thanks for sharing it with us! |
itsme07863
Thursday 28th April 2005 22:49 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| wow. really good. i liked lol
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sonicdale
Tuesday 12th April 2005 12:09 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
That Harry was crying in the shed with the bike was touching. Bravo.
The "intro" they gave to each other was so cheeky it was sneaky. Good work.
hm. the 'closeness' scene will need some explaining. They 'ignored' it. Funny. Hope they 'make up' soon.
There's an awful lot of magic going on here... and they're underage... Not that I'm complaining, mind, but how did you work that out?
It...it.. it... just ended. Oh, you sneaky skneaky squeaker! Why?
Oh, it was getting just good...harumph. Okay. I'll bite. Are you going to continue this??? It SAYS completed at the top, but I don't buy it.
It's too darn good to leave it there --- or it's too darn good to continue it. I can't decide.
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| Wednesday 13th April 2005 09:01 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine (Author Response) |
Alas, this is all there is. I left it open-ended on purpose, so the reader could continue it in his/her imagination. Evil, I know, but not all that unusual for me.
As for the underage magic, my theory is that there's no way the MoM can keep track of who's doing what spells in a large magical household such as the Weasleys', so they leave it up to the parents to monitor their children. Of course, after Fred and George, Molly more or less gave up.
Thanks for the thoughtful review! |
critmo
Tuesday 4th January 2005 11:50 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| G is unusually passive here - and H a little to dominant, to my taste. |
sunsethill
Friday 2nd July 2004 10:37 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| This was a very well-written, compelling piece. Great job! |
Tosca
Friday 2nd July 2004 01:05 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| I read this on the ficafest, and I must say that I just love it. It makes me so happy, and you have such a good grasp on the characters. I love the interaction. I love this! Good for you! You will be posting the little epilogue, right? |
Kelleypen
Friday 2nd July 2004 01:04 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| nice. keep going with this. great potential! |
hypnotic_angel_13
Thursday 1st July 2004 23:35 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
| I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT!!! |
Ima Quidditch Fan
Thursday 1st July 2004 21:34 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This has moved into my very favorite short story #1 position. This was well written, original and like I said I LOVE the plot.
Really I have wanted Harry to take Ginny on a real date... on the bike, and an Indian too!
(You know, I thought that they stopped making those, but I saw a dealership in San Diego on Miramar Blvd, last week when I was there for business... I had to stop in for a t-shirt!)
So now I have to ask.... please, oh, please continue this. |
happydog
Thursday 1st July 2004 19:44 | The Mechanics of the Human Engine |
Great story & excellent writing style ****1/2. I hope it continues!
One note, you should learn about motorcycles if you're going to write about them. If your foot is on the gas, you've got your foot on the right handlebar. If you change it to either "her foot on the gear shift (left foot)" or "her foot on the break (right foot)" it'll work. Check out http://motorcycles.about.com/cs/beginners/a/howdoesbikework.htm.
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