gymnastgal19
Saturday 30th August 2008 22:48 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
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pyromain
Friday 24th August 2007 09:40 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| Loved the fights between them reminds me of Hermione and Ron. |
Phirebrand
Sunday 22nd October 2006 14:22 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| Just thought I'd let you know I reallt liked this one! It was well written, with good dialogue and clear emotions. and I laughed at every argument they had. |
Astrid
Friday 22nd September 2006 23:29 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| Ooh, I like this. Good work. |
Uzamaki-girl
Tuesday 5th September 2006 14:18 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| Great story.^^ |
bbnaz
Tuesday 22nd August 2006 15:14 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| Very good story up until the last sentence. You had me in your grip all the way down and then it felt like you had to "wrap it up" in 15 words or less. I love your writing, so please don't consider this a "dis", just an observation on how I felt at the end of your story. |
Felix Felicis
Sunday 20th August 2006 17:07 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
I really liked it! Ginny certainly has a way of putting Harry in his place and you've captured that perfectly. I like how you had all of the Weasleys working together to keep Harry and Ginny apart. Very creative story!
A good/bad thing is that it fits so well with canon. That means you followed up nicely on the books, but for us H/G'ers you couldn't have them get together Oh well! |
EJH0904
Wednesday 16th August 2006 17:59 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| I loved all the angst even though we know that canon resolved (or is yet to resolve) these issues in a different way. Very well written and interesting, despite how long ago it was written. Nicely done. |
Stormdelver
Tuesday 15th August 2006 10:08 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| You know, every girl (woman) that I ever found worth pursuing a realtionship with all started with a deep appreciation for the firery devotion they had to their beliefs- I think it just made me want to figure out what made them tick. Funny thing though, fire attracts fire and it can build into a raging forest fire as they feed off each other or burn each other out- I hope Harry and Ginny burn the forest down. |
Grandma Kate
Monday 14th August 2006 11:05 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| Very plausible. I like your moody Harry and ever so honest Ginny. |
XXXmister-E werepony unit
Wednesday 15th February 2006 14:55 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
as harry watched her retreat, he thought she was the most frustrating,obstinate, and infuriating girl he had ever met. grining widely,he decided he realy liked that about her.running to catch up, he looked forward to their next fight.
briliant! that got me laughing |
jeanne
Sunday 30th October 2005 09:09 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| I loved that ending."running to catch up,he looked forward to thier next fight" Cute. |
Katieay
Wednesday 1st June 2005 14:02 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| Ha! That was lovely. Great Harry angst, Ginny tenaciousness. I've read this before but I decided that tonight I was going to on a reviewing spree tonight! I think Harry finally spewing it all out was the bit that got me choked up the most. I love that you didn't make it easy on either of them, to get to the point where they are now. It's very realistic. Loved it! Well done! |
pixiellie
Tuesday 28th September 2004 17:27 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| Dear Elsielann,
This was a wonderful short story- very different to anything I’ve read so far. I feel you’ve taken the characters in a unique direction, while still holding onto the spirit of the books. Harry has been pushed too far emotionally. He would still be in the beginning stages of grief, and not know how to deal with this kind of pain and guilt. Couple that with the anger and shock over the prophesy, and our boy is a jumble of emotions. I believe that Harry would bottle things as much as he could: yet at the same time, everything gets to be too much and he lashes out or sinks into depression. I can imagine clearly the Harry you describe. Excellent job.
I like your version of Ginny better though. At first the reader may see her as confrontational, but that’s just an expression of her caring. (She is a redhead after all.) While Harry sees her as an irritant, she’s actually torn. Love and protectiveness of her family’s feelings against a boy who’s hurting them without realizing it, and worry, sympathy, and a little love for a boy who’s gone through more pain than she knows. Add to that she’s no longer a child with a crush, Ginny’s never been afraid to tell someone they’ve been a prat. It takes a special kind of courage to say something no one else will.
I love that they argued through the bathroom door-this happened in my house all the time. Hee. I laughed that Ginny was so mad she stormed out (wink: you used the word tramped) to let Harry have it. Even better that he didn’t notice she was half dressed until Ron pointed it out. Best line: “Maybe he was a prat.”
Just a little note about the birthday scene. I love Arthur, and his joy of sharing the muggle army knife with Harry was very sweet. Even if Harry did have mixed feelings about it.
It’s very telling that when Ginny got up and looked at him, Harry followed. Even when angry with her. Part of him must want either to talk things out, guilt free yelling, or Ginny’s attention. Maybe all three? Finally the prophesy is told to someone. Leave it to Ginny to lock onto the positive part of the words. Harry was too close: all he heard was kill.
We end on a pretty optimistic note- I like that Ginny gets the last word-and walks away. Harry needs a girl who’ll be a challenge. I’m looking forward to their next fight as well.
I enjoyed your writing style, a very nice mix of humor and tension. Your grammar and spelling were excellent. My thanks to your betas and I can’t wait to read more of your work. pixie
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Cera
Sunday 4th July 2004 14:42 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
| I liked that you wrote Ginny the way you did. She's more like the Weasley we got a glimpse of in OotP... speaking her mind and such. The way that Harry eventually revealed the prophecy was good and realistic. Great job! |
DailyProphetReporting
Sunday 4th July 2004 06:25 | Diametric Alley Opposed |
I rather enjoyed that. You did a very nice job building the story around the characterizations OotP gave us rather than trying to adapt Harry and Ginny too much. The results, are ... excited, to say the least.
You're obviously making a bid for a record number of rows in a short, one-shot fic here, and you did a nice job with them. Through all the bickering, the fact that Ginny is able to get through to Harry -- even if he doesn't exactly enjoy it or appreciate it -- comes across nicely. You've certainly got the tension and angst bit down!
-KC |
