kopfsalat2000
Friday 18th November 2011 16:09 | Rows |
| Oh, I like that story! Especially the episode at the end |
potters_love_redheads
Thursday 18th March 2010 10:17 | Rows |
| Lovely! I really liked Hedwig's observations at the end, most charming haha |
gymnastgal19
Monday 11th August 2008 16:23 | Rows |
nice story
i love the ending with hedwig and her thoughts about the whole thing... and that she was smart enough to get them to stop otherwise they would be nesting too soon
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lolipop
Wednesday 28th May 2008 10:00 | Rows |
| I love the way you've put in Hedwigs piont of view! It is so sweet! |
The Pharaoh
Monday 5th May 2008 02:00 | Rows |
| The Hedwig POV at the end there is fantastic, really great. |
| Monday 5th May 2008 07:18 | Rows (Author Response) |
The Hedwig POV at the end there is fantastic, really great.
Glad you thought so! I enjoyed that....
Ah, Hedwig. :sigh:
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haileythefan
Sunday 23rd September 2007 18:40 | Rows |
| This is a very intense story and really engaging good job |
DebbieO
Saturday 22nd September 2007 19:40 | Rows |
| I loved Hedwig's perspective in the end particularly. Sweet. |
Delfino
Friday 17th August 2007 09:41 | Rows |
| Great! Absolutely great! Hedwig's part in it was the best, it wouldn't have ended any better way. Wonderful job!!! |
pyromain
Sunday 15th July 2007 10:54 | Rows |
| This is a great way of getting Harry and Ginny Back on track, I hope JKR does something like this in the next book. We will see in a week if it goes down like this. I for one hope so, Harry does need Ginny. |
Rhetor
Wednesday 13th June 2007 15:14 | Rows |
Oh, this is just splendid. I have no idea how I missed it before. Sherry was right about combining the two pieces.
Right now the shift to Hedwig's POV at the end is what really captures my attention -- you nailed it perfectly. I could enumerate the ways in which you nailed it, but my enumeration would be as long as the whole passage. I grinned and chortled out loud and said "brilliant!" and my daughter wanted to know what was going on.
Petunia's change of heart and manner is breathtaking and heartbreaking and actuallybelievable -- if I were writing a scene like that my biggest fear would be that Petunia'd come off false.
As for the train -- one of my best friends married her young man knowing he had cancer that was probably terminal. They had only a year or two together; so it hit me in the gut. |
Lauberry
Saturday 24th March 2007 09:56 | Rows |
oh, I love it! My favorite parts were Petunia's shock ("Has he ever shown you a picture of his mother, my sister?... Hmm, do get him to do that.") and Hedwig's POV at the end.
I'm glad you combined the Ginny going and Harry waiting stories into one, they just belong together.
Lauren |
| Saturday 24th March 2007 10:49 | Rows (Author Response) |
oh, I love it! My favorite parts were Petunia's shock ("Has he ever shown you a picture of his mother, my sister?... Hmm, do get him to do that.") and Hedwig's POV at the end.
I'm glad you combined the Ginny going and Harry waiting stories into one, they just belong together.
Lauren
Thanks so much! The two halves of the story were always meant to be part of the same plot, but I agree—Sheralyn's suggestion that I shuffle the two together really did make for a much better story.
And yeah—the Hedwig bit is my favorite too. |
DaFalcon
Wednesday 2nd August 2006 19:43 | Rows |
| Loved it. Especially Hedwig. Very nice touch there. |
DaFalcon
Wednesday 2nd August 2006 06:21 | Rows |
| Very nice story. I loved it, especially the ending. Great work. |
cckeimig
Monday 15th May 2006 22:18 | Rows |
| Wonderful! And definitely meant to be "all rolled together" in one chapter. I especially liked the end. Hedwig's pov is so much clearer than we stupid humans allow ourselves to see things... |
Ladybug
Sunday 30th April 2006 01:41 | Rows |
| Great story, just beautiful in its detail and emotion and humour. I loved Ginny's little rehearsal in her head just before knocking on Harry's door, but I loved the real thing even more. |
Bella
Saturday 29th April 2006 22:34 | Rows |
| Oh, that was...wonderful. Breathtakingly, at some points. The imagery, the detail, the progression - absolutely wonderful. I loved the dualing point of views, the Muggle man at the beginning, Hedwig at the end. It was a perfect blend of humor, tenderness, and sadness all at the same time. Wow. |
TigerLily8186
Saturday 29th April 2006 17:01 | Rows |
| heh. That Hedwig pov at the end was funny. The nice Petunia was rather shocking though... |
hp4-sauce
Monday 24th April 2006 16:03 | Rows |
It was a great idea to combine these two (related) stories to make one very, very good one.
I do think Ginny understands Harry and his motivations better than just about anyone else (Gowdie's essay on why Harry chose Ginny - which I believe you encouraged her to post on the HP Essays site - is instructive on their connection) and I wonder if she won't show unusual and admirable restraint in Book 7 in keeping her distance from Harry; at least at the beginning.
That said, I like this version a lot. |
girl from ipanema
Sunday 23rd April 2006 14:30 | Rows |
| This is a wonderful fic! Bless you, great grammar, nice narrative flow. I love Hedwig's point of view. I think Harry and Ginny and Hermione are right on character. How about a longer Horcrux hunt along these lines? |
ImmortalPhoenix
Saturday 22nd April 2006 21:21 | Rows |
I loved it. It would be awesome to see it turn into a chapter story instead of a one-shot but I might be asking too much. I loved how you added Hedwig's P.O.V. at the end.
Great work!
Kortnee |
Faelaern
Saturday 22nd April 2006 20:53 | Rows |
| Very nicely done. I liked the first best, I think. I like the way Harry's choice, the problems with it, and what the right thing to tell the girl in such a situation were all put into perspective. The second was good too, though I don't think I buy Petunia's change in character here. It's not poorly written; just gave me pause. A 'de gustibus' issue, perhaps. The best part about the second was Hedwig's p.o.v., very neat to see. |
anonymous5
Saturday 22nd April 2006 20:06 | Rows |
| Ahh, lovely. It is easy to imagine that this is how the second or third chapter of the seventh book could actually proceed. Thank you for a unique take on the all-boys-are-prats theme! |
Connor Landon
Saturday 22nd April 2006 13:08 | Rows |
| That was awesome! I especially enjoyed the story from Hedwig's POV. This is really nicely set up and the Cancer-Boy was a tear jerker. Well done! |
ridgeback77
Saturday 22nd April 2006 07:37 | Rows |
| That was a masterful blend of those two original stories. I always forget about Hedwig acting as chaperon. I'm glad somebody is looking out for Harry's virtue. |
critmo
Saturday 22nd April 2006 05:12 | Rows |
Isn't the guy on the train a little too blunt? And if you put him in, shouldn't you use him a little more? The questions he raises are only dealt with briefly. If Ginny refered back to him at a later time, he became a more integral part of the story. That's just an impression, though.
Apart from that, I love it. Your descriptions are masterpieces, e.g.:
He could see how this search for the Horcruxes was going to go: Harry miserably thinking about Ginny, and Ron and Hermione madly trying to find dark corners to snog in. Brilliant.
Also, the change in Aunt Petunia is a very good idea. I don't necessarily believe it, but I like the idea anyway. Again, you could have made a little more of it. The conclusion from Hedwig's perspective is very good, but feels a bit rushed. However, you probably have a good point there, anyway, i.e. that they simply can't live without each other. So, congrats on an exceptional story!
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daisymom
Friday 21st April 2006 23:53 | Rows |
| This was good, but what's with Pentunia? Why would she even care if Dumbledore was killed? You left me with a lot more quesitons. It's be cool if you continued this. |
jeanne
Friday 21st April 2006 16:23 | Rows |
| This was delightful. I especially loved Hedwigs, inner conversation with herself, regarding her nestling and his mate,and the way she described their actions. Simply a wonderful piece of writing. |
Evelyn
Friday 21st April 2006 13:51 | Rows |
Hedwig was hilarious! "the nips he so richly deserved ... he did not mind"
And of course, the rest of the story was just as good... |
Ima Quidditch Fan
Friday 21st April 2006 11:53 | Rows |
| I *sniff* love this story! I really love Hedwig's views. |
lilyshope
Friday 21st April 2006 11:02 | Rows |
For some reason I absolutely love it when Hedwig's POV is used. It seems so fitting especially since she has been, like Harry's friends at Hogwarts, more family to Harry than the Dursley's.
Anyway this was a great little tale and I can honestly say that I would love for something like this to happen in JKR's book seven. It was sweet and really rang true to the characters. |
Jorgie
Friday 21st April 2006 10:49 | Rows |
| This was very well done and a very enjoyable piece. I especially liked Hedwig's view. extremely cute! |
va guy
Friday 21st April 2006 09:34 | Rows |
| wonderful. I've read both stories on another site, and I love how they meld together so well. Very lovely. |
Kokopelli
Friday 21st April 2006 08:24 | Rows |
A lovely story - especially the Hedwig POV at the end. Preening is good!
J |
Curren
Friday 21st April 2006 04:59 | Rows |
| hehe, loved that final pov!! wish there were more stories around with that pov... nice story, overall |
Machiavelli Jr
Friday 21st April 2006 04:09 | Rows |
Genetics suck. I foresee Harry and Ginny producing short, ginger kids with glasses and very bad hair. Ron and Hermione would have tall, also ginger kids with much worse hair,
Good idea combining the two fics - I'd read Rows before and it is better with 168 added. I love the opening, and Petunia's a realistic cross of her usual self, terrified and sympathetic. I usually don't like Lily and Ginny looking alike, but it fits well here forever, with a little help from |
parakletos
Friday 21st April 2006 01:44 | Rows |
I don't think I saw this when it was first posted elsewhere, I really enjoyed it.
Row houses? do you mean terraces? |
aschowin
Thursday 20th April 2006 23:43 | Rows |
| Neat take on how they'll get back together. My favourite part was Hedwig's perspective, very amusing. Great job writing this. |
