kmb
Sunday 24th August 2008 16:51 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| I am not on here as much as i used to be, but your story has seemed to catch my interest. I am curious to see where it will end. One more thing i though this was a great line "Now," Voldemort continued after lifting the Cruciatus for the second time, "remove yourselves from my presence. The stench of your failure annoys me.". great line again!! |
| Tuesday 26th August 2008 18:26 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake (Author Response) |
I really appreciate the that you are enjoying this story.
thanks for taking the time to read it
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FireFairy
Tuesday 25th March 2008 08:36 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| UPDATE THIS SOON PLEASE! IT sounds really interesting |
FireFairy
Tuesday 25th March 2008 08:36 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| UPDATE THIS SOON PLEASE! IT sounds really interesting |
lantis222
Wednesday 27th February 2008 08:52 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| Very interesting start. I can't wait to see where you take this. Good job! |
Ellery
Tuesday 26th February 2008 09:44 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
So does she have to marry him before his 16th bday or just form some kind of bond?
I really like this story so PLEASE continue! |
Ellery
Tuesday 26th February 2008 09:44 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
So does she have to marry him before his 16th bday or just form some kind of bond?
I really like this story so PLEASE continue! |
FireFairy
Monday 25th February 2008 17:27 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| This is going to be an interesting story, please update soon! |
Patches
Monday 25th February 2008 11:48 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| This is a very good beginning. I look forward to more of this story. Thank you for writing. p |
raptor red
Monday 25th February 2008 00:40 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
the plot is ineteresting. I agree with the others on the prologue being a little short...although i'm guessing there will be something in the next chapter?
keep it up!
i'll be looking forward to the next chapters!! |
thwaaack
Saturday 23rd February 2008 13:12 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| Interesting start.....I look forward to more. |
Comet Moon
Saturday 23rd February 2008 08:11 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
Hey. Glad to see you again.
Is this the revised chapters?
Wasn't sure on the preveiw. Though I think that the toture scene was altered
GREAT to have you back
Ja ne
Jim |
masterdonkey
Friday 22nd February 2008 19:39 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| this story sucks |
xakko
Friday 22nd February 2008 14:07 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
Interesting start - the timing of the second prophecy is good - Voldemort had already marked Harry by that time. Voldemort using crucio on his servants works, but is a bit overdone in fanfic. One would think he would have access to a wide array of tortures to keep his servants in line.
Looking forward to reading more of this. |
Ginny WcPr
Thursday 21st February 2008 17:31 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| wow, this really sounds good.... |
potterlovesginny
Thursday 21st February 2008 10:55 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| Great chapter! Wish it was longer, but interesting plot line. When you say a "bond" with Ginny, could that be friendship, because he became friends with her when he was 15/ i suppose not since he'll need to go back in time... |
ihatesnakes
Thursday 21st February 2008 10:15 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
Nice beginning, and well written. The plot sounds interesting.
A couple things: I felt the prophecy a bit clumsy and wordy. Unless it was intentional, Dark lord should have both D and L in upper case. And when you wrote: "PED to DDD and TED concerning HJP, unknown girl, and He-Who-Must-Be-Named, December 19, 1982" didn't you mean to call Voldy He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named"?
I look forward to more! |
narumi
Thursday 21st February 2008 09:56 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| Great start! Can't wait for more! |
jorgemtz88
Thursday 21st February 2008 07:11 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
I like it, it was very good.
Please update soon. |
Professor_Chris
Thursday 21st February 2008 04:07 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| Interesting start, looking forward to seeing what happens. |
PPL
Thursday 21st February 2008 03:12 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
Looking forward to next chapter.
This beginning looks promising.
I hope the next chapter will be longer though. |
nas4a2
Thursday 21st February 2008 00:01 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| not bad could of been a little longer. but i still can't wait to see what happen's next |
Arnel
Wednesday 20th February 2008 21:55 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
Oh, what a creepy prophesy! And on top of the one Harry already has to cope with, too. I'm looking forward to finding out how Dumbledore and Harry eventually discover the existance of this one.
The scene at The Burrow was nice. I love Molly's observations and preferences in beaux for Ginny. It cracks me up that she prefers her daughter dating a young man she knows!
You've done a good job with Voldemort. He's definitely the monster he should be!
Great chapter. I'm looking forward to future chapters. |
