mitzijani
Monday 4th July 2011 18:02 | Afterthoughts |
| Beautiful piece |
Dad
Monday 15th March 2010 11:39 | Afterthoughts |
| I have read this before, but on re-reading it, I think it is worthy of being used as the penultimate chapter of J.K.R.'s final book. Good writing. |
bcollins
Sunday 1st November 2009 22:45 | Afterthoughts |
I love stories about after the battle, what did they do, what did they say, how did they feel
This was great I LOVED it. Thanks for sharing. |
ISolemnlySwearIamUpToNoGood
Tuesday 10th February 2009 13:53 | Afterthoughts |
| THat was so perfect! |
ibelieveintruelove
Tuesday 9th December 2008 21:05 | Afterthoughts |
If I was Hermione, I would go on for at least three feet of parchment about how amazing the story was at attacking all the little details but also at pulling together the big picture, as well as many other technical writing facts and techniques that were used wonderfully in your story. But I happen to be a lot more like Ron so I'll get straight to the point:
That was bloody brilliant, mate |
Hihavaniceda
Monday 1st December 2008 05:40 | Afterthoughts |
| Yes ... that was good ... that was very good .... it was up there with some of the best I have read .... thanks. |
lindaleeann
Thursday 25th September 2008 18:33 | Afterthoughts |
Those last two paragraphs in particular say so much and that peace is what we need in this dominator product of a world. Once there was a world where men and women worked together as these four have worked together. Even though their roles were different, no one was superior (as in ruler or "I'm better than you") but each had their strengths and weakness and used them to help and love each other. Yes love is the answer.
Thank you for this wonderful moment in time. |
snuggle the muggle
Sunday 31st August 2008 00:35 | Afterthoughts |
I just wanted to let you know that I have rec’d your story and posted a link to it in the new LJ HP community hpmssgmoments, or Harry Potter Missing Moments. Your story fits nicely into canon and makes a nice addition to our archives. Please feel free to come over and take a look at what we are doing and your entry (posted under "The Dogs of War"). We are a small group at the moment, but we hope to get your story some new readers and some new reviews as we grow.
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Anthony May
Saturday 30th August 2008 19:26 | Afterthoughts |
| Thank you for an extremely satisfying story - something I was a bit surprised that J.K. didn't do. You are a great writer! |
TangoCharlie
Tuesday 19th August 2008 22:04 | Afterthoughts |
Wow! I'm so impressed at how beautifully you've captured this moment in time. As others have said, I like that it's not overdone. I found your writing to have a very realistic feel, especially the way you've highlighted that being able to smile, laugh and joke in such sombre times is just as important and comforting as saying those 'serious' things that come straight from the heart. The tone is perfect for the situation and the people involved, and your characterisations spot on.
What I also really love is the way you've got the best of both worlds where Ginny is concerned. I believe that, as much as we all love Ginny, the simple fact is that she's not one of the three who have been best friends and nigh on inseperable for 7 years, and she didn't share their experiences over the year they spent out and about on their mission. BUT, this does not mean she'll ever be on the outer of the trio, as she shares a special bond with each individual. It makes your piece all the more believeable for me that H,R & H get their moment (perhaps even their final moment...) as a trio to recognise what they've been through and done together before they are joined by that wonderful fourth who is in her own way just as important.
So again, well done - I really, really enjoyed reading this!
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debbie1407
Wednesday 13th August 2008 15:38 | Afterthoughts |
really outstanding story! it feels like a continuation of DH, which is great because i would have liked another chapter at the end that maybe featured moments like these. I love the way it's not too 'overdone' there's no big showy displays of emotion (esp when Ginny shows up) it's just friends (& lovers) reconnecting with each other and taking comfort from their presence after a traumatic ordeal.
I also love the fact that Harry decides to go back to Hogwarts in your story too, i think he would be really keen to get some peace and quiet away from fans and the wizarding press to decide the next stage of his life , even it does mean having to do McGonagall's Transfiguration homework!
keep up the good work!! |
Silver Phoenix
Wednesday 6th August 2008 13:56 | Afterthoughts |
I feel like I've read and/or reviewed this before, possibly on another site...but here goes again anyway.
Excellent. Everyone is in character, and you got their dialogue spot-on. I especially liked Ron's lines. This is a very well-written, thoughtful, and realistic take on what would have happened after the battle. I felt like it was a continuation of DH. |
Crumplehornedkiwi
Monday 4th August 2008 04:57 | Afterthoughts |
this was a lovely missing moment.
your 'soothing sense of peace' permeates this whole story and gives off a lovely feel
The aftermath of any event can be traumatic you have given the right ambiance for what has to be such a hard event to process.
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MissJadeHarley
Sunday 3rd August 2008 02:56 | Afterthoughts |
I had to reread it.
AMAZING. |
beechy1001
Friday 1st August 2008 04:44 | Afterthoughts |
| brilliant story |
beechy1001
Friday 1st August 2008 04:42 | Afterthoughts |
| brilliant story |
Patches
Friday 1st August 2008 02:39 | Afterthoughts |
| This is a really good "after the battle" story. Thanks so much for writing. it. It really brings things into perspective. I look forward to more stories like this. p |
joes12321
Thursday 31st July 2008 03:41 | Afterthoughts |
A great story. I always thought DH ended a chapter too soon. This is the chapter we should have gotten.
The attention to detail and the summing up of their friendship is great. Probably the best of the "moments after" stories I've read. |
Astrid
Wednesday 30th July 2008 16:34 | Afterthoughts |
| This is beautiful. I love their interactions, the balance between acting serious and lighthearted. I love the difficulty the boys have with emotion, but that they still want to acknowledge it. I also like that you start with the Trio having their own time together before seamlessly adding in Ginny. Good work! |
MissJadeHarley
Wednesday 30th July 2008 09:18 | Afterthoughts |
One word.
WOW.
The missing chapter from Deathly Hallows, I absolutely loved it.
No wonder it's story of the week! |
cckeimig
Tuesday 29th July 2008 21:44 | Afterthoughts |
| This was absolutely gorgeous. I just loved it! Thank you for writing such a beautiful story! |
Felix Felicis
Tuesday 29th July 2008 17:48 | Afterthoughts |
Wow! Great missing moment, maybe one of the best I've ever read. Your attention to the details of their feelings was exquisite. The shifting of emotions from low to high and back again was very well done and felt so real. I'm quite sure this is exactly how they would have felt and how they would have reacted. Perhaps the best moment was when Ginny came into the room. After so many years of the trio, it actually seemed like something was missing until she showed up. Maybe that missing piece was more evident because of the actions and words of Ron and Hermione for each other. Harry needs someone like that, too, and that's what Ginny is for!
You really did an outstanding job here. Though we only get to read about Harry's emotions, we know that they're all feeling the same things. The silences and the few words were well placed and just made everything seem that much more real. Writing silences and pauses is very difficult but you accomplished it well.
I really enjoyed this story. Thank you so much for sharing it! |
rich.sanidad
Tuesday 29th July 2008 10:49 | Afterthoughts |
| I'm very glad this story got nominated for Story of the Week as I'm not sure I would have found it on my own. I thought your characterizations were dead on, which really enhanced my enjoyment of the story. Thanks for writing. |
nickjgirl1
Tuesday 29th July 2008 10:32 | Afterthoughts |
| i love this story!it is so good!i love .they are soo cute together!good job! |
Steven Carnell
Monday 28th July 2008 08:47 | Afterthoughts |
| Very well written. Beautiful story with expressive turns of phrase and lovely use of English. Your skills are complete. 10/10 |
potterlovesginny
Monday 28th July 2008 05:38 | Afterthoughts |
That was such an amazing story! I loved when they would just peter out into this comfortable silence, and everything seemed so peaceful! I think that's how it would have happened if J.K.R. had written it, the peace mixed with the sadeness of those lost. I don't know why J.K.R. said that Harry didn't go back to Hogwarts to repeat his last year. I think that Hogwarts was Harry's first home, and that he'd want to finish out his time there, and I think he'd especially enjoy ONE peaceful year. (Though knowing Harry, trouble would find him!) I think it would give him some closure. Anyway, fantastic story!
loves |
Sheepie_101
Saturday 14th June 2008 05:50 | Afterthoughts |
| AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!! Exactly how I pictured it! + = LOVE!!!!!!!!111 |
Sheepie_101
Saturday 14th June 2008 05:50 | Afterthoughts |
| AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!! Exactly how I pictured it! + = LOVE!!!!!!!!111 |
santafe
Tuesday 29th April 2008 14:33 | Afterthoughts |
Great missing moment. I like this, and I am pleased you wrote it. Relief seems uppermost, but I sort of feel too that there will be an emotional rollercoaster as everyone tries to get back to where they feel they ought to be.
Thanks. |
hidden_treasures
Monday 21st April 2008 17:32 | Afterthoughts |
| great fic. I love how you laced sadness with humor. And the humor was very humorous. LOL! good job! |
Delfino
Monday 14th April 2008 16:35 | Afterthoughts |
Great job! This was really, really well done. Actually, it had the exact effect on me as it did Harry: it completely soothed me. I love the idea of the four of them sitting and watching the sun come in at dawn. So peaceful!
Thank you so much for writing this, I absolutely loved it |
Through~Lily\\\'s~Eyes
Thursday 10th April 2008 21:24 | Afterthoughts |
| Oh, man, this was wonderful! For the first time, I feel as though someone has effectively captured the essence of Hermione, Ron and Harry. Throughout the whole thing, your characters were very believable as the Trio. It was almost exactly as JKR would have written the aftermath, I think. It was very real: The tears and the "We love you, too, Harry" was so typically Hermione; the awkwardness was perfectly Ron; and the actions and confidence of Ginny was just right. Harry, oh Harry, was excellent. He was awkwardly modest, thoughtful and reflective, just the Harry I know and love. So, in short, everything was spot on. Very, very well done! |
GhostWriter
Thursday 10th April 2008 08:12 | Afterthoughts |
A very nice fic! I especially liked the the banter between the foursome. Well done! I hope you write more.
Cheers! |
ProfessorBinns
Wednesday 9th April 2008 18:48 | Afterthoughts |
| This is very good, some of the closure DH lacked without getting too complicated or going beyond canon. I like the sense of peace. Well done! |
DukeBrymin
Wednesday 9th April 2008 10:41 | Afterthoughts |
| Sweet story. Seems a little more subdued than I would have thought, but still a pretty good representation of how they might try to come to terms with the world-changing events they've just been through. Needs more fluff though |
EEvans
Monday 7th April 2008 21:29 | Afterthoughts |
| I thought it was beautiful. I also read it twice and it was better the second time. It felt like an ending, finally, for DH. I felt like the book just stopped abruptly, and after reading this I feel like I've finally read the end. Beautifully written and structured, it felt like a final conclusion for the entire series. |
Arnel
Monday 7th April 2008 21:17 | Afterthoughts |
I am so glad you chose to archive this terrific story here at PS! I read it when it first came out on Checkmated and thought it was really good then... the second time around it's even better. I love the tone of this story. It's so full of hope, yet so full of uncertainty because of the conflicting emotions Harry and the others are feeling. I've noticed the number of times you mention Harry being aware of what's going on outside his window: you've done a nice job incorporating this "global" awareness with his attention to details within the room. Well done! I'm really glad, too, that you left room for the characters to discuss things further when they aren't quite so emotionally taxed; there will definitely be a time for Harry and Ginny to talk and that she seems to need as much time as Harry to come to terms with what he did and where he went during the year and what each of their roles has wrought.
This story definitely gets for creativity and being well-written enough that I took the time to read it twice! |
lantis222
Monday 7th April 2008 16:25 | Afterthoughts |
| That was beautifully written. Well done, I think you've given us a glimpse of what it might have been like to survive. |
aharkins
Monday 7th April 2008 16:05 | Afterthoughts |
| What a sweet, sad, lovely story. Thank you for writing and for sharing your work. |
pyromain
Monday 7th April 2008 15:00 | Afterthoughts |
| great fill in for the book, Always love these missing moments. thanks to you and your beta's |
calleighpotter
Monday 7th April 2008 10:29 | Afterthoughts |
| That was extremely well written, full of details, exactly how I imagined it. Thanks! |
elvenlaughter
Monday 7th April 2008 08:04 | Afterthoughts |
| Oh, this is gorgeous. I absolutely love this... especially the conversation near the end discussing Harry's past "feats" and Ron's marvelous comment about being a "right useful old chap." Heehee. And I also loved the second to last paragraph about peace... Harry definitely deserves and needs some of that now. |
gymnastgal19
Monday 7th April 2008 08:02 | Afterthoughts |
wow!!! This was an awesome after battle scene I wish that JK had put somerthing like this in the ending... heck this is worthy to be put in DH its awesome!
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tknott
Sunday 6th April 2008 21:56 | Afterthoughts |
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hp4-sauce
Sunday 6th April 2008 21:45 | Afterthoughts |
| There have been a few very good Hogwarts Battle aftermath stories and this one ranks with them. Very well written and I liked the contemplative theme. Nice characterizations of Harry, Ginny, Ron and Hermione. |
a diffrent type of flower
Sunday 6th April 2008 19:44 | Afterthoughts |
| wow. this was perfect. this sounds like this couold be in the book. I Loved it! |
majolie
Sunday 6th April 2008 18:41 | Afterthoughts |
Very nice. You managed to evoke that tranquil feeling you describe in the story throughout the narrative illustrating your point nicely. I love it that Ginny joined them and was peaceful and did not push too hard - I've always felt that if she did not fight him when he left, then she would not fight him when it was all over.
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brios
Sunday 6th April 2008 18:05 | Afterthoughts |
| Lovely piece, made me cry. |
potterlovesginny
Sunday 6th April 2008 13:21 | Afterthoughts |
| BRILLIANT story! It really captured what I think would have happened th day after. Harry being modest as well, was really fitting. I think the way you put all his achievments really summed them up. Often you don't realise the full enormity of his achievments. Anyway, I think you should write more just afeter the battle fics, as this one was so good! |
ngayonatkailanman
Sunday 6th April 2008 13:13 | Afterthoughts |
An excellent one-shot. Well written. Balanced. Peaceful. Profound. Excellent description of emoitions, thoughts, and scenes.
Well done. |
QtipKiwii
Sunday 6th April 2008 12:22 | Afterthoughts |
| Exactly how I imagined the post-Voldy world to be. |
Grandma Kate
Sunday 6th April 2008 11:16 | Afterthoughts |
What a lovely 'missing moment'. Seeing everything from Harry's familiar POV was just right.
I liked this fragment-
“Yeah,” he said. “But my whole life’s been an adventure. I’m about ready for some quiet myself, to tell you the truth…” He glanced sideways at Ginny as a picture came into his mind of him and her, strolling in a garden… their garden, perhaps, situated behind a lovely little cottage with lots of windows… one of which might open into a nursery… |
bazza28
Sunday 6th April 2008 02:50 | Afterthoughts |
| a stunning story. Beggining and ending were very emotional and beautifully written. |
fuzzybubbles
Saturday 5th April 2008 23:48 | Afterthoughts |
| Excellent. Really great. Fantastic ending. Loved it. |
